Okeydoke, New Commercial Demo Time

Chrisrice · 04-28-2009, 04:56 PM

I was listening to my then-current commercial demo a few weeks back and cringed a few times... that's when I knew it was time for a new one. For a while I had a seperate "conversational/real" demo and I incorporated a few elements of it into this new effort.

Thanky in advance for listening and any feedback you might have!

JoeActor · 04-28-2009, 05:42 PM

Hey Chris,

My quick take: I like it.

For "real", some spots are dead on.
Could turn down the announcer on a few other.

But I didn't hear any that really set off my "announcer guy" radar!

Definitely gettin' close to the money mark!,
Joe J Thomas
www.JoeActor.com
www.SoundsGoodToYou.com

alexrain · 04-28-2009, 09:17 PM

Not that I'm an expert on these things by any stretch of the imagination, but I think it sounds pretty awesome. Great deliveries, mix of styles, pacing, energy. Terrific production to boot! I think you oughta be proud of this.

Humbly,
Alex

Jon Morss · 04-28-2009, 10:47 PM

Chris - You rock man! This is very cool. You impressed me in Julie's workshop and you certainly did not let me down here.

For me, one thing that would really set off the spot where the guy is looking for the dog would be to add a female voice in there. I think a bit of dialog would be a nice touch.

Nice one dude.

Scott Pollak · 04-28-2009, 10:51 PM

Ditto, ditto, ditto, with the exception of the State Farm spot. I didn't believe it for a second. Everything else is pretty much spot-on, but that one jumped out at me as being very forced. It's so short anyway I'd deep-six it. You have other low-key bits in there that work great anyway.

Besides that, I wish my demo was half this good. This is good stuff!

Mike Sommer · 04-29-2009, 01:12 AM

NICE WORK!

I'm not buying the State Farm either. Instead of sounding like you lost everything in a hurricane, it sounded like you
weren't sure where to send in your premium check.

I would start with the #2 spot, and put the first spot after the Durracell. You should always start with your signature voice and end with
your signature voice. A nice little dialog spot with a female would be good.

Production is very nice.

Did I mention that I liked this demo?

Great JOB!!!!!!!

Emorgan_Voiceovers · 04-29-2009, 09:37 AM

Agreed. Great stuff. I vote for ditching the State Farm spot too. Everything else is killer. You should definitely peak some interest with it.

Scott Pollak · 04-29-2009, 11:24 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Emorgan_Voiceovers

You should definitely peak some interest with it.

Who knows, you might even PIQUE some interest, too!

pique[2] - Definition from the Merriam-Webster Online Dictionary

Mike Sommer · 04-29-2009, 11:38 AM

Oh.. those pesky words again.

Chrisrice · 05-01-2009, 09:37 AM

Thanks everyone! I was a little on-the-fence regarding the State Farm spot too... thanks for pushing me off!

It's funny Mike... for the longest time I thought my excited semi-hard-sell like in the Friday's spot WAS my signature voice! Must be the radio in me. But considering that's not getting me nearly as much work as the read in the 2nd cut it definitely makes sense to re-order things a bit.

Hafta check the archives and see if I have anything laying around with a female dialogue in it... the spot Jon mentioned actually originated as a M/F dialogue but I didn't have a copy of the final spot so I reworked it and just used part of the male v-o.

Thanks again for checking it out!

04-28-2009, 09:17 PM	#3 (permalink)
alexrain Rainman Join Date: May 2008 Location: NE Texas, USA Posts: 150	Not that I'm an expert on these things by any stretch of the imagination, but I think it sounds pretty awesome. Great deliveries, mix of styles, pacing, energy. Terrific production to boot! I think you oughta be proud of this. Humbly, Alex __________________ Alex Rain www.alexrain.com ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "My brain has a mind of it's own."

04-28-2009, 10:47 PM	#4 (permalink)
Jon Morss Jon Morss Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Antelope, CA Posts: 643	Chris - You rock man! This is very cool. You impressed me in Julie's workshop and you certainly did not let me down here. For me, one thing that would really set off the spot where the guy is looking for the dog would be to add a female voice in there. I think a bit of dialog would be a nice touch. Nice one dude. __________________ Jon Morss "You can get everything in life you want if you will just help enough other people get what they want." -- Zig Ziglar

04-28-2009, 10:51 PM	#5 (permalink)
Scott Pollak Warm, Real, Natural Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: Atlanta, Georgia Posts: 1,883	Ditto, ditto, ditto, with the exception of the State Farm spot. I didn't believe it for a second. Everything else is pretty much spot-on, but that one jumped out at me as being very forced. It's so short anyway I'd deep-six it. You have other low-key bits in there that work great anyway. Besides that, I wish my demo was half this good. This is good stuff! __________________ Scott R. Pollak Warm, Real, Natural... The Voice of NPR Atlanta www.voicebyscott.com

04-29-2009, 01:12 AM	#6 (permalink)
Mike Sommer User Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: Los Angeles Posts: 1,158	NICE WORK! I'm not buying the State Farm either. Instead of sounding like you lost everything in a hurricane, it sounded like you weren't sure where to send in your premium check. I would start with the #2 spot, and put the first spot after the Durracell. You should always start with your signature voice and end with your signature voice. A nice little dialog spot with a female would be good. Production is very nice. Did I mention that I liked this demo? Great JOB!!!!!!! Last edited by Mike Sommer; 04-29-2009 at 01:15 AM.

04-29-2009, 09:37 AM	#7 (permalink)
Emorgan_Voiceovers Emorgan_Voiceovers Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Lafayette, Indiana Posts: 768	Agreed. Great stuff. I vote for ditching the State Farm spot too. Everything else is killer. You should definitely peak some interest with it. __________________ Pay Me To Talk, Pay Me To Shut Up, Either Way.. http://www.morganvoice.com

04-28-2009, 05:42 PM	#2 (permalink)
JoeActor Administrator Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Los Angeles, CA Posts: 2,896	Hey Chris, My quick take: I like it. For "real", some spots are dead on. Could turn down the announcer on a few other. But I didn't hear any that really set off my "announcer guy" radar! Definitely gettin' close to the money mark!, Joe J Thomas www.JoeActor.com www.SoundsGoodToYou.com

04-29-2009, 11:38 AM	#9 (permalink)
Mike Sommer User Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: Los Angeles Posts: 1,158	Oh.. those pesky words again.

05-01-2009, 09:37 AM	#10 (permalink)
Chrisrice User Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Sacramento, CA Posts: 143	Thanks everyone! I was a little on-the-fence regarding the State Farm spot too... thanks for pushing me off! It's funny Mike... for the longest time I thought my excited semi-hard-sell like in the Friday's spot WAS my signature voice! Must be the radio in me. But considering that's not getting me nearly as much work as the read in the 2nd cut it definitely makes sense to re-order things a bit. Hafta check the archives and see if I have anything laying around with a female dialogue in it... the spot Jon mentioned actually originated as a M/F dialogue but I didn't have a copy of the final spot so I reworked it and just used part of the male v-o. Thanks again for checking it out!

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