First try - self produced

[Dan]

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[JoeActor]

Hey Dan,

Well, I'm not much of a production guy, so I can't comment on that side of things.

Pace seems good, nice mix of spots, and good overall time for a demo.

The IVR one's my fave. GMC's my second fave.

On some, it's a bit presentational (instead of conversational). I also noticed some mouth sound or possibly over-pronunciation on segments (esp. the first one). Wish I could narrow it down a bit more for you...

Hope this helps a bit,
Joe J Thomas
Joe J. Thomas Acting Portfolio (http://www.JoeActor.com)

[Dan]

Yeah, I didn't care for that first spot after I heard it on another computer in my office instead of in the studio. Funny how that works. Thousands of dollars of equipment in the studio and I hear the mouth noises through $39 PC speakers. Sheesh.

Re: GMC spot. Someone in the Leads n' Reads thread talked about just "throwing away" a line. That's exactly what that spot was (with what I consider a "character" voice: "Earl" - my tough guy). That was the first read, I was totally blowing through it, and no matter how carefully I tried on later reads, it never sounded that comfortable.

The problem with being in corporate training for so long and speaking to large groups in large rooms is that I have developed a "presentational" tone to my voice that I really have to fight.

Thanks for the feedback!