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PierceVoice
01-03-2008, 08:53 PM
Let's try this again. And thanks to the whole gang who gave thoughts on the last go. This is definitely more me, less announcer... I'm hoping it's enough to offer as a service. (I know this, at 1:45, is long but I liked the story)
Bob Bergen
01-03-2008, 10:41 PM
Hey bud!

yes, it's fun. Tons of personality. But as you said, it's way too long. And only shows off this one read/style. It's great for a "portion" of your narration demo. In fact, it's damn good!!!!! But you need a minute with a variety of spots. This is a winner, though!

;-)
chucktaylor
01-03-2008, 10:47 PM
what Bob said...(remember when in doubt always defer to Bob) (-: Honestly Bro, I liked this one a lot more, it had the punchlines and it held my interest the entire time, but for a demo, Bob's right shorter and more variety, just think of it like you would an imaging demo for Krash.

ct
PierceVoice
01-03-2008, 10:55 PM
Hot damn, you fellas made my friggin' night!!! And now, as we First Coasters say, "It's 2 minutes till tomorrow... I better head home and see the wife".
PierceVoice
01-04-2008, 11:53 AM
I think I might go with this one... http://piercevoice.com/images/piercevoice-narration1-08.mp3

Kinda more like it?
Bob Bergen
01-04-2008, 01:48 PM
Again, still too long. Especially the opening spot. I think based on your changes you feel the need to sell the content/punchline of your spots, rather than you. It's all about you. One minute with a variety of narrations. This one opens and closes with the same "feel." You absolutely have the personality and style down. Show off other sides of you. And include more network narration: E!, Discovery Channel, HGTV, etc., along with SOTs from each show.
PierceVoice
01-04-2008, 03:44 PM
Okay... wait... will report back! (Bob = Rocking)
PierceVoice
01-07-2008, 02:06 PM
(just to update you)

I feel I'm hogging the critique attention here-- and I'm certainly feeling humbled by the amount of edu-ma-cation I've picked up from you guys-- so gonna give more time to this one (though I've a much better representation of your advice on my site now). When I feel like the material's more "there", I might sit back down on that thar seat of heat.

Until then, THANKS!