View Full Version : Floating a new one....
Colin Campbell
11-17-2008, 11:02 PM
Messing with my first new demo in almost a year. I think I've come a long way so I decided to try to make a new one...
PierceVoice
11-18-2008, 07:58 AM
All the pieces sound great-- although there may be a bit too many. I am familiar with a some of the scripts here, so maybe that's throwing off my ability to step back, but I felt like the abrupt cutting off of the first few spots was a bit distracting-- sort of threw off my need for rhythm.
I think I'd like to hear more of the Visa and the "localization" piece (are they the same?)... ONLY imho. (did I mention all the pieces sound great?)
Emorgan_Voiceovers
11-18-2008, 09:57 AM
Colin, I love it. While I tend to agree with Chadd on the "I'd like to hear more of" statement, the demo shows good diversity, and shows off your talents very well.
Colin Campbell
11-18-2008, 10:04 AM
These are very helpful perspectives. Thanks guys. I'm going to continue to tweak it. Maybe one or two less pieces and more of the other ones.
JoeActor
11-18-2008, 10:06 AM
Hey Colin,
I think the transitions are a bit quick, or maybe you could place similar spots further apart. I'd add a touch more tonal and/or pacing variety to the mix...
... of couse it could be these 99-cent store speakers I'm listening on ;-)
2 cents,
Joe J Thomas
www.JoeActor.com (http://www.JoeActor.com)
Colin Campbell
11-18-2008, 04:14 PM
I've heard of a technique of varying the EQ to make them sound different but I'm not sure I'd like that. I hate to take something out of the sound of certain spots.
I'm gonna work on it further. Thanks for the input.
BobbyH
11-19-2008, 10:54 AM
The female at the beginning through me off...big time. It took me two more cuts to settle in and listen to you. That is far too long for a producer, since most make up their minds in six seconds to decide if they want to continue listening. Your first cut should be you and you alone with your signature read. Otherwise, I think this is a great demo for you.
Scott Pollak
11-19-2008, 12:48 PM
Colin,
I'm totally with Bobby on the negative side of opening up with Cira. This is YOUR demo, not hers.
Good variety here, with typical outstanding production values, but there are a few suggestions I'll throw out:
- it seems to be a demo without a direction. Within this one demo I heard characters, straight narration and other things. If you want it to be an overall COMPOSITE demo that shows a bit of everything, then it works. But I wasn't sure if you were wanting to showcase your acting skills, narrations skills or what (they're all good)
- The ending is way too abrupt. Just left us hanging. I'd find something a bit smoother to go out on.
- And personally, I don't think your opening scratch game piece is very strong. I would like to hear you open up with either the second or third piece, both which really showcase your voice well. I also love the "globalization" piece. That's pure YOU.
Overall, you sound great. You're a pro, no question about it. I think a tweak here and there and your demo will be bulletproof.
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